Many people think haiku is all about the 5/7/5 syllables. But the essence is really about an experience in a sharp moment or season, and then to cast the final line in a striking manner — something totally unexpected, but still on target, and carried by the image rather than commentary.
Of course, pulling it off isn’t easy!
Haiku has always been a favorite of mine…I’ve never been very good at it but I wanted to try my hand again in this self challenge. Because its the word art form I ‘fear the most’ I thought let me get it out of the way. Perhaps I will attempt again. I do appreciate your critique though.
fearfree living 
Love the snap, the element too often missing from attempted haiku.
Thanks for the critique. Can you say more on what you mean by ‘attempted haiku’?
Many people think haiku is all about the 5/7/5 syllables. But the essence is really about an experience in a sharp moment or season, and then to cast the final line in a striking manner — something totally unexpected, but still on target, and carried by the image rather than commentary.
Of course, pulling it off isn’t easy!
Haiku has always been a favorite of mine…I’ve never been very good at it but I wanted to try my hand again in this self challenge. Because its the word art form I ‘fear the most’ I thought let me get it out of the way. Perhaps I will attempt again. I do appreciate your critique though.
LOVE JNANA HODSON’S OBSERVATION….”ATTEMPTED HAIKU”